Wednesday, 29 November 2017

GRANNY SMITH - 100 word story

Here is my 100 word story courtesy of the Friday Fictioneers photo prompt. 


GRANNY SMITH


PHOTO PROMPT © What’s His Name



She said the apple was named after her. 
In return for humongous slabs of apple pie, we children kept her orchard tidy. The rest of the garden was out-of-bounds.
She warned us about the falling-down shed. 
'It's dangerous.' Her roly-poly smile vanished. 'Don't let me catch you in there.'
When rumours started about the falling-down shed I began to notice other oddities, like how Granny Smith licked children's grazed knees before applying antiseptic. 
I got curious.
While she was busy making pies I crept into the falling-down shed. Behind the bath were bundles of curious children's bones.
A footfall sounded.




I hope you enjoyed my story and look forward to reading your comments.

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61 comments:

  1. Sometimes it is best to ignore our curiosity and leave well enough alone... Good one.

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    1. Absolutely - you know what they say about curiosity killing the cat.

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  2. Dear Susan,

    The sight of her licking children's knees made me shudder. Well done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Yes, our Granny Smith has some shudder-inducing habits.

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  3. She sounds like a witch in disguise. I hope she will have the time to run.
    Great storytelling, Susan.

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    1. Thanks for your comment. I don't know if she's a witch - but she's certainly inhuman.

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    1. I hadn't thought of it that way - but you're right - it could be a modern fairy tale.

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  5. Sounds like someone Hansel and Gretel met once.

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    1. Ah, another reader seeing this as a fairy tale. :)

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  6. Oh that is most ominous... anyone who licks wounds before healing them...
    And that curiosity has killed more than one cat...

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    1. Yes, Granny Smith is definitely an ominous old lady.

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  7. Knee licking... now that says it all...

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  8. It's a modern fairy tale, the smiling granny who tunrs out to be a witch who eats children. Well written tale Susan

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  9. That's put me right off eating apples! Great story.

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  10. Gotta love a well-crafted, short horror story!!!
    Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/11/29/friday-fictioneers-a-memory-a-fear-glad-i-am-older/
    Scott

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  11. Curiosity killed the cat. This kind of reminds me of Hansel and Gretel.

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    1. I had no intention of writing a fairy story - and it's interesting that that seems to be how it's being interpreted by lots of readers. :)

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  12. I, too, felt it was a fairy story. As that apparently wasn't your intention, I wonder why I did? perhaps I was too uncomfortable with the idea of a cannibalistic granny...Definitely an effective horror story, Susan!

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    1. Yes, I was thinking more 'horror' than 'fairy story', but it doesn't matter. The only thing that matters is that my stories entertain. :)

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  13. Add me to the list of those who think of this alongside stories like that of Hansel and Gretel. Granny Smith is creepy indeed!

    Speaking of Hansel & Gretel, have you ever seen Hansel & Gretel: Witch Hunters? It's a funny "sequel" to the original story.

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    2. Yes, she might have a roly-poly smile, but don't be taken in!
      No, I haven't seen that sequel - must look out for it. :)

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  14. what at ending. it caught me totally by surprise.

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  15. Eeek! A cannibal Nana!!.....we're in real trouble now!

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    1. Well, to be honest we don't know if she actually eats the children, or simply murders them.

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  16. But at least it satisfied her curiosity (in addition to satisfying the cannibal's appetite of course)

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    1. Ah, another reader who has made the cannibal assumption. This is proving to be an interesting lesson in interpretation. :)

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  17. Ooh, nice one! I love "bundles of curious children's bones" - says it all :-)

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    1. Thanks, Alistair. Yes, children are innately curious aren't they?

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  18. Well, nobody can live just on apple pie, can they?

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    1. Ha ha - yes, but does she really eat them? Only you can decide.

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  19. Eeek! Such a lovely old lady, too!

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    1. Ha ha - yes, and the dear little ones get homemade apple pie!

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  20. You took this prompt to scary heights.

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    1. Sometimes you gotta go with your imagination. :)

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  21. She should have read Hansel and Gretel and started to worry at the licking of the knees. That would have been enough for most to stop visiting Granny Smith. Great story.

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    1. Yes indeed, instead it piqued her curiosity.

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    1. Ha ha - now that's two words you wouldn't normally put together!

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  23. Oh my gosh! Granny Smith Apples turned into Granny Smith Monster!

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    1. Sadly, yes. But at least it's fantasy... one hopes!

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  25. Well, Granny Smith warned her. Now we know where she gets the lard that makes her pie crusts so flakey - Russell

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  26. Knee licking apple named grannies... scary story i'd have needed that toilet if I had Found those bones.

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    1. Yikes, I don't know if you'd have time with those footsteps approaching.

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  27. I'll think of this when I make my apple crumble this afteroon with my beautiful Granny Smiths!

    Click to read my FriFic!

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    1. He he - I love apple crumble nearly as much as Granny Smith.

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  28. oh my, this is a granny i need on my peace chasers team XD I feel she would become useful. Superbly HOrrific! I can't wait to read more! ♥Sin

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    1. Yes, well she might have to feature again in future stories! :)

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  29. Ouch... this does not sound well... wonder what she did with the children... meat pies?

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    1. Whatever it was, it wasn't good - not for the children anyway.

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